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Though I would change a few things in the line.
(No pressure, of course, and I appreciate that you took the time to respond at all!)
I like this, its evocative.
I'd skip the second line What then? Its assumed.
And if gaining the truth meant giving up everything else...would you pay that price?
To this...
[character name] loses everything to reveal the truth, no matter what the price.
And thanks very much for the extra effort, Jimmie! Much appreciated!
To gain the truth, [character name] would have to give up everything else.
That leaves just a little bit of doubt that he'll do it, but we assume he will (right?)
The one thing I don't like about the "ties that b(l)ind" is that it's kind of a vague cliche... the phrase "the ties that bind" gets used a lot but I'm never quite sure what they mean by it: the hymn, the Springsteen song, etc.
Conceptually I like what you seem to be trying to get at with the father/creator line, but I'm not sure that "the truth about a father can destroy a family" is a strong/clear enough idea to base it on... what is this referring to ... what truth?
The "knowledge is like water...." line is a piece of folk wisdom that doesn't tell us anything specific about your story (except the general theme).
I'd explain more (especially after you were so thoughtful in your analysis!) but I suppose the point is seeing what each line evokes independent of the rest.
I agree that the 'ties that bind' is vague, as is the 'knowledge is like...'. I suppose it's something I struggle with a bit in these little catch-phrases. Keeping them open, vague, seems to invite the reader (in this case, editor) to participate a bit, perhaps provoking curiousity. Something like Ellis' "It's a strange world. Let's keep it that way." Another one I saw an editor call out was "Where were you when magic came back?" which is sort of vague and could be mean quite a bit.
Anyway, again, I appreciate the thoughts/discussions/corrections/impressions!
Thanks again, to all !